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11．請(qǐng)將文章答案用0.5毫米黑色簽字筆寫(xiě)在答題卡相應(yīng)的位置上．
每個(gè)人的一生中都有許多值得感謝的人，你最想感謝的人是誰(shuí)呢？是父母、老師、朋友，還是…？請(qǐng)以Tom為名給他/她/他們寫(xiě)一封信，說(shuō)說(shuō)你的心里話(huà)．
要求：
1.80個(gè)詞左右．
2．表達(dá)正確，行文流暢．
3．至少寫(xiě)出一個(gè)具體事例．
4．信件開(kāi)頭、結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)人總詞數(shù)．
5．文中不能出現(xiàn)考生的真實(shí)姓名、地址、學(xué)校等相關(guān)信息．
Dear，
Dear father，
I have never expressed my thanks and respect to you．Today I want to say，"I love you，dad!"In my heart，you are not only my father，but also my good friend．
Since I was born，you have given me all your love and care．In order to create a better living condition and let me receive better education，you have to work hard every day．I always remember your coming home late and feeling tired．
Except that，you are very strict with me．You often tell me to study hard，get along well with others，not to give up when facing difficulties．Once I got a C in the math exam，I felt sorry for it，I thought you would be angry，instead，you weren't angry with me，you helped me to find out why I failed，and encouraged me to be brave．Since then，I always smile at life whenever I have any trouble．Thank you very much for everything you've done for me．
Best wishes!
Yours，
Tom．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇命題作文，所給材料非常簡(jiǎn)略，故動(dòng)筆前先要圍繞要點(diǎn)組織材料，確定寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容．寫(xiě)作中注意將感謝的對(duì)象，原因等介紹清楚．在寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意時(shí)態(tài)，人稱(chēng)和固定詞組的搭配，要注意語(yǔ)言的規(guī)范性．本文時(shí)態(tài)問(wèn)題比較復(fù)雜，注意時(shí)態(tài)與時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配問(wèn)題，人稱(chēng)主要是第一人稱(chēng)，注意主謂一致問(wèn)題．寫(xiě)作中適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系．
高分句型：
①I(mǎi)n order to create a better living condition and let me receive better education，you have to work hard every day．為了創(chuàng)造一個(gè)更好的生活條件，讓我接受更好的教育，你不得不努力工作每一天．
in order to為了，引導(dǎo)一個(gè)條件狀語(yǔ)從句，let sb do sth讓某人做某事；have to必須，不得不； every day每天．
②Thank you very much for everything you've done for me．非常感謝你為我所做的一切．Thank you very much for sth為某某而感謝某人，for是一個(gè)介詞，后面通常跟名詞，代詞或者動(dòng)名詞，you've done for me在這里作定語(yǔ)修飾everything，構(gòu)成一個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句．

解答 Dear father，
I have never expressed my thanks and respect to you．Today I want to say，"I love you，dad!"In my heart，you are not only my father，but also my good friend．（引出話(huà)題）
Since I was born，you have given me all your love and care．In order to create a better living condition and let me receive better education，you have to work hard every day（高分句型）．I always remember your coming home late and feeling tired．（重點(diǎn)寫(xiě)爸爸為了我辛苦的勞作）
Except that，you are very strict with me．You often tell me to study hard，get along well with others，not to give up when facing difficulties．Once I got a C in the math exam，I felt sorry for it，I thought you would be angry，instead，you weren't angry with me，you helped me to find out why I failed，and encouraged me to be brave．Since then，I always smile at life whenever I have any trouble．（通過(guò)例子來(lái)說(shuō)明爸爸對(duì)我的愛(ài)）Thank you very much for everything you've done for me（高分句型）（感謝爸爸所做的一切）．
Best wishes!
Yours，
Tom．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本文是一篇小作文，寫(xiě)作時(shí)動(dòng)筆前先要注意認(rèn)真寫(xiě)作要求，確定寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容；分析內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，列出一些基本詞匯及詞組；注意表達(dá)的條理性，用好連接詞；為豐富文章的文采，可以多用一些復(fù)合句．最后，注意不要犯語(yǔ)法、句法以及搭配性錯(cuò)誤，寫(xiě)好后反復(fù)讀幾遍，適當(dāng)修改．