Question

7．現(xiàn)在，社會上補習機構(gòu)火爆，在各種媒體上，我們經(jīng)常可以看到"名師名校"、"個性化教學"、"終級押題"、"秒殺中考"等廣告詞．你相信這樣的宣傳嗎？為此，你所在的學習小組針對這一社會現(xiàn)象，圍繞"課余時間我們應該更多地去做什么才能夠得到全面的發(fā)展"展開了討論．最終大家形成了以下的觀點：
請你根據(jù)同學們的上述觀點，并結(jié)合自己的親身體驗，就此問題陳述自己的看法，內(nèi)容必須包含以下要點：
1．Would you like to take after-school classes？Why or why not？（Please give 3reasons．）
2．What would you like to do in your spare time？
3．Please tell us one of your stories of this kind of experience．
要求：
1．詞數(shù)80詞左右；
2．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的人名與校名．
It seems that many students go to take after-school classes，but it is just a waste of time and money．I used to go to different kinds of these classes，too．But later I realized I couldn't do that any more．I began to spend more time reading，doing sports and taking some social activities．
Meanwhile，I didn't fall behind others in study．
I prefer to have time to enjoy the nature．It's a wise way to know about the world．So I often put my spare time to good use by watching animals，plants，rocks．a(chǎn)round my city．I still remember that day I went to the Forest Park this spring!And I found a few plants appearing in my biology books．It offered me an opportunity to deepen my understanding of my textbooks．
Learning by using is a real practice．I have benefited a lot from it．Now I am becoming more creative and confident than those who are always involved in taking after-school classes．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是根據(jù)同學們的觀點，并結(jié)合自己的親身體驗，就"課余時間我們應該更多地去做什么才能夠得到全面的發(fā)展"此問題陳述自己的看法．時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1．你想?yún)⒓友a習班嗎？理由（3條）．
2．課余時間你想做什么？
3．有關(guān)的一次經(jīng)歷
要求：
常用到的重點短語：
a waste of 浪費…
used to do sth 過去常常
not…any more 不再
spend+時間+doing sth 花時間做某事
fall behind落后
offer sb sth 提供某人某物
be involved in被卷入…
【高分句型】
1．It seems①that many students go to take after-school classes，②but it is just ③a waste of time and money．
①that引導的表語從句，和系動詞seem構(gòu)成系表結(jié)構(gòu)．
②but表轉(zhuǎn)折
③a waste of 浪費…
2．Now I am becoming more creative and confident ①than those ②who are always ③involved in taking after-school classes．
①比較級的運用．
②定語從句，who是關(guān)系詞，做從句的主語，修飾先行詞those．
③be involved in被卷入…

解答 It seems that many students go to take after-school classes，but it is just a waste of time and money．【高分句型】I used to go to different kinds of these classes，too．But later I realized I couldn't do that any more．I began to spend more time reading，doing sports and taking some social activities．Meanwhile，I didn't fall behind others in study．（不想?yún)⒓友a習班以及理由）
I prefer to have time to enjoy the nature．It's a wise way to know about the world．So I often put my spare time to good use by watching animals，plants，rocks．a(chǎn)round my city．（課余時間想做什么）I still remember that day I went to the Forest Park this spring!And I found a few plants appearing in my biology books．It offered me an opportunity to deepen my understanding of my textbooks．（一次經(jīng)歷）
Learning by using is a real practice．I have benefited a lot from it．Now I am becoming more creative and confident than those who are always involved in taking after-school classes．【高分句型】

點評 以提綱提供情景的作文．要注意遣詞造句的靈活性和語法規(guī)則的正確性，就不會造成審題不清而偏離主題，但要注意，文章必須覆蓋所提供的各個提綱的要點．行文間要注意簡化描述，用簡短的語句代替冗長的語句．在作文完成的時候，應該檢查、修改，以免遺漏一些需要表達清楚的要點和細節(jié)．