Question

介紹你朋友王峰的家鄉(xiāng):
1.他的家鄉(xiāng)是無錫，是一個(gè)非常美麗的城市，這兒的空氣清新。
2.住在一個(gè)現(xiàn)代化的城鎮(zhèn)，鎮(zhèn)上有個(gè)劇場，還有一個(gè)美麗的公園。
3.早晨人們喜歡在公園慢跑；公園是他最喜歡的地方，因?yàn)樵谀强梢院秃芏嗯笥蚜奶臁?br />4.他非常喜歡他的家鄉(xiāng)，我們?cè)谂瓮�游覽他的家鄉(xiāng)。
Wang Feng is a friend of mine.
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Answer 1

Wang Feng is a friend of mine. His hometown is in Wuxi. It is a beautiful city.The air is fresh here.He lives in a modern town.There is a theatre in town.There is also a beautiful park.People like jogging in the park in the morning.The park is his favourite place because he can chat with many friends there.He likes his hometown very much.We are looking forward to visiting his hometown.

             
試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，本文已經(jīng)給出了主要寫作要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆前要先認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，然后圍繞要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。寫作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上；結(jié)合材料內(nèi)容，可知本文主要是第三人稱，主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)進(jìn)行敘述。語言的表述應(yīng)該符合語法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，例如like doing sth, chat with sb ，look forward to doing等短語，文中還用到了原因狀語從句The park is his favourite place because he can chat with many friends there. 文章層次清晰，內(nèi)容飽滿，表達(dá)流暢。