Question

請(qǐng)以The Changes to My Hometown為題。根據(jù)中文提示，寫一篇短文。要求意思連貫，符合邏輯。詞數(shù)70個(gè)左右。

十年前	現(xiàn)在
生活貧困， 交通不便， 高樓少， 喝河里的水， 空氣好	高樓大廈很多， 水污染嚴(yán)重， 交通便利， 住房寬敞、明亮， 許多人有自己的汽車。
很高興看到好的改變；希望更好

 

Answer 1

In the past, ten years ago, My hometown was very poor. The lives of people were poor. The transportation was not convenient. People went someplace only on foot. People lived in small houses. But at that time ,the environment was very good. The air was fresh. People directly drank water from the river.
Now, great changes have taken place in my hometown. There are many tall buildings. People go to someplace by bus, car ,underground or train. People live in big and bright flats. Many people have their own cars. But water pollution is very serious. The air isn’t as good as before.
I am very happy to see these changes. I hope that my hometown will become better and better in the future.

這是一篇給材料作文，要求寫一篇介紹自己家鄉(xiāng)的短文。題目中給出的材料較為詳細(xì)，動(dòng)筆前應(yīng)根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容組織語(yǔ)言，列出簡(jiǎn)單提綱，確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)，關(guān)鍵單詞等問(wèn)題。注意不要遺漏要點(diǎn)，注意文后要適當(dāng)表達(dá)自己的感想。通過(guò)閱讀材料可知這篇短文的時(shí)態(tài)問(wèn)題比較復(fù)雜，涉及過(guò)去，現(xiàn)在和將來(lái)三種時(shí)態(tài)，寫作中注意時(shí)態(tài)與時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配問(wèn)題。注意語(yǔ)義通順，符合邏輯關(guān)系。上下文之間可以適當(dāng)使用連接詞。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：做英語(yǔ)書(shū)面表達(dá)時(shí)，只要注意認(rèn)真審題，分析體裁，確定時(shí)態(tài)；分析內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，列出一些基本詞匯及詞組；注意表達(dá)的條理性，用好連接詞；為豐富文章的文采，可以多用一些復(fù)合句。最后，注意不要犯語(yǔ)法、句法以及搭配性錯(cuò)誤，寫好后多讀多修改，我想一定會(huì)寫出滿意的文章來(lái)。