Question

假設(shè)你是謝凱，是一名中學(xué)生。你們學(xué)校附近有一條河，去年河邊開(kāi)辦一家工廠

河水受到污染。請(qǐng)你向廠長(zhǎng)寫(xiě)一封80 詞左右的信，信中包含以下內(nèi)容：

 1)建廠前河流的概況； 2) 工廠傾倒廢水造成的后果； 3). 呼吁采取措施,保護(hù)環(huán)境.

參考詞匯: river, clean water, fish, swimming, flowers and grass, open the factory, pour waste water, dirty, smell terrible, fish die, pollute, stop, clean up, do something, protect environment

Dear sir,

   I’m Xie Kai,

 

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear sir,

   I’m Xie Kai,.Our middle school is near the river.Several years ago, there were a lot of fish swimming in the clean water and we could see flowers and grass on both sides of it. But now things have changed. The water becomes dirty, it smells terrible and all fish die .I find waste water was poured into the river from the factory everyday since it was built here.I think we should do something to stop polluting the river,such as cleaning up the river.Protecting pollution is our duty .

                                                                        Yours sincerely

                                                                           Xie Kai 

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。作者主要寫(xiě)在工廠建成前后河的變化，全文主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，例如 a lot of，swimming in the clean water ，on both sides of it，smells terrible，poured into ，stop polluting，such as，cleaning up等短語(yǔ)；時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句 since it was built here；賓語(yǔ)從句waste water was poured into the river from the factory everyday， we should do something to stop polluting the river；并列句The water becomes dirty, it smells terrible and all fish die；被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)如was poured， was built；現(xiàn)在分詞作定語(yǔ)如 swimming；動(dòng)名詞作主語(yǔ)如Protecting pollution 。 文章層次清晰，內(nèi)容飽滿，表達(dá)流暢。

考點(diǎn)：提綱作文