Question

某中學(xué)在開展“崇尚節(jié)儉，文明做人(advocating thrift and being civilized)”活動(dòng)一年來(lái)，取得了很好的效果，但還有極少數(shù)學(xué)生做得不夠好，在校園里依然還會(huì)出現(xiàn)以下圖片中的情形。請(qǐng)你選擇以下現(xiàn)象中的幾種或全部進(jìn)行描述，并就中學(xué)生如何“杜絕浪費(fèi)，文明做人”提出至少兩點(diǎn)建議。
                    
leave the tap on    leave the lights on    throw the food away    draw on the wall  drop rubbish everywhere
要求：1. 文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名、校名。
2. 語(yǔ)言通順，意思連貫，書寫規(guī)范。
3. 詞數(shù)80～100。文章的開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
Some middle school students aren’t doing enough in “advocating thrift and being civilized”.
 
 
 
 

Answer 1

Some middle school students aren’t doing enough in “advocating thrift and being civilized.”
We’re sorry to see that there is still some waste in our school! For example, some often leave the taps on after washing their hands. In the dinning hall, a lot of food can be seen left after the meals. What’s worse, we often find that waste paper is thrown everywhere, which makes others feel uncomfortable. In addition, some students like to write or draw on the wall or on the desk.
As middle school students, we should develop good habits and stop wasting anything. Let’s do it from now on!

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們對(duì)學(xué)生們的一些浪費(fèi)行為進(jìn)行描述，并提出合理建議。題目中已經(jīng)給了我們開頭Some middle school students aren’t doing enough in “advocating thrift and being civilized.”，清楚地點(diǎn)明了在學(xué)生中間仍然存在著浪費(fèi)的行為。因此接下來(lái)我們就可以接著這個(gè)話題，對(duì)學(xué)生們的浪費(fèi)行為進(jìn)行描述。我們可以從題目中給出的幾幅圖片中選擇幾種，詳細(xì)地描寫學(xué)生們做得不好的地方。然后我們要對(duì)這些現(xiàn)象提出建議，這就需要我們自己發(fā)揮想象力，把這一部分的內(nèi)容補(bǔ)充完整。寫作時(shí)，我們要仔細(xì)觀察圖片，將這些圖片中的內(nèi)容表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，使用正確的時(shí)態(tài)和人稱。另外還需注意語(yǔ)句間的連接，以使短文表達(dá)流暢、連貫。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。在這篇短文中，作者對(duì)學(xué)生們中間還存在的浪費(fèi)、不文明的現(xiàn)象進(jìn)行了描述，并在文章的最后給出了自己的建議。符合題目要求，內(nèi)容完整，結(jié)構(gòu)清楚。作者對(duì)題目中給出的四幅圖片進(jìn)行了描述，如We’re sorry to see that there is still some waste in our school!、In the dinning hall, a lot of food can be seen left after the meals、What’s worse, we often find that waste paper is thrown everywhere、In addition, some students like to write or draw on the wall or on the desk。這部分中作者使用了比較多的句型和短語(yǔ)，如What’s worse、We’re sorry to see…、in addition等。最后作者給出了自己的建議，這里作者使用的短語(yǔ)是develop good habits,這個(gè)短語(yǔ)中的develop非常好；還有句型stop doing sth.，停止做某事。