Question

【題目】假定你是李華。上周你在某國(guó)外網(wǎng)站購(gòu)買(mǎi)了一支錄音筆(recording pen),收貨后你發(fā)現(xiàn)它有很多質(zhì)量問(wèn)題。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列提示給客服經(jīng)理Miss Green發(fā)一封電子郵件。

內(nèi)容包括:

1.來(lái)信目的;

2.產(chǎn)品(錄音筆)問(wèn)題;

3.你期待的解決辦法。

注意:

1.詞數(shù)100左右;

2.可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié),以使行文連貫;

3.開(kāi)頭和結(jié)束語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好,不計(jì)人總詞數(shù)。

Dear Miss Green,

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I' m looking forward to your early reply.

Best wishes !

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Miss Green,

I’m writing to tell you something about the recording pen I bought from your website last week. There seems to be something wrong with it. First, the voice isn’t so clear as you claimed. Second, it’s not easy to operate, which caused me much trouble. Third, it often breaks down. In my opinion a recording pen at such a high price shouldn’t have so many problems.

I’m not satisfied with all these above. I would appreciate it very much if I could get my money back and I’ll send it back to you as soon as you return the money. If it can’t be helped, I wish you could have it repaired or changed.

I’m looking forward to your early reply.

Best wishes!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于應(yīng)用文，要求考生給客服經(jīng)理Miss Green發(fā)一封電子郵件反饋錄音筆的質(zhì)量問(wèn)題

第一步: 審題

體裁: 應(yīng)用文

時(shí)態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般將來(lái)時(shí)。

結(jié)構(gòu): 總分法

總分法指把主題句作為總說(shuō)，把支持句作為分說(shuō)，并以這種方式安排所寫(xiě)內(nèi)容。

要求：

1.來(lái)信目的;

2.產(chǎn)品(錄音筆)問(wèn)題;

3.你期待的解決辦法。

第二步: 列提綱 (重點(diǎn)詞組)

be easy to；break down；in my opinion；satisfied with

第三步: 連詞成句

1. I’m writing to tell you something about the recording pen I bought from your website last week.

2. First, the voice isn’t so clear as you claimed. Second, it’s not easy to operate, which caused me much trouble.

3. Third, it often breaks down. In my opinion a recording pen at such a high price shouldn’t have so many problems.

4. I’m not satisfied with ail these above. I would appreciate it very much if I could get my money back and I’ll send it back to you as soon as you return the money.

5. If it can’t be helped, I wish you could have it repaired or changed.

根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進(jìn)行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時(shí)態(tài)問(wèn)題。

第四步: 連句成篇 (銜接詞)

1.表文章結(jié)構(gòu)順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second，And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列補(bǔ)充關(guān)系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, including,

3.表轉(zhuǎn)折對(duì)比關(guān)系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(從句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand,On the other hand,while,as for

4.表因果關(guān)系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接與過(guò)渡，書(shū)寫(xiě)一定要規(guī)范清晰，

第五步: 潤(rùn)色修改