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假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三（1）班的班長(zhǎng)李華，你們?nèi)�班同學(xué)在“五一節(jié)”放假期間開(kāi)展了“體驗(yàn)一天低碳生活”的活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，寫(xiě)一篇英文短文，介紹同學(xué)們這一天的體驗(yàn)活動(dòng)，向?qū)W校“英語(yǔ)園地”投稿。短文的開(kāi)頭已為你寫(xiě)好。詞數(shù)不少于60。
提示詞：disposable chopsticks
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A Low-carbon Day
The students in our class took part in an activity of “Experience a Low-carbon Day” during the Labor Day vacation.…

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The students in our class took part in an activity of  "Experience a Low-carbon Day" during the Labor Day vacation．In the morning, we went to parks by bus instead of going by car．At noon, when we dined out in a restaurant, we refused to use the disposable chopsticks served there．Instead, we each took with us a lunch box in which there was a pair of chopsticks and a spoon．In the afternoon, we went shopping at a supermarket．To avoid the damage the free plastic bags caused to the environment, we put what we had bought into cloth bags．It was hot at night．We didn't turn on the air conditioners．We used electrical fans to cool ourselves down．
Although the activity lasted only one day, we have learned a lot from it．We realize that we should take actions for our earth from the small things around us．In this way, we are sure to live in a better world．

試題分析：本文是篇圖畫(huà)作文，根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示和四幅畫(huà)，學(xué)生很容易把握寫(xiě)作要求和寫(xiě)作目的。通過(guò)認(rèn)真審題，首先要判斷文章的時(shí)態(tài)，要求在五一期間，體驗(yàn)一天低碳生活，并介紹這一天的活動(dòng)包括四個(gè)方面，注意內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)要完整。所以要用一般過(guò)去時(shí)。人稱(chēng)必須用第一人稱(chēng)we。還應(yīng)該注意詞匯和句式的多樣性及語(yǔ)言的準(zhǔn)確性。使用比較高級(jí)的句子和句子之間的連貫性，以提高作文的檔次。注意細(xì)節(jié)如拼寫(xiě)、標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)或書(shū)寫(xiě)等。詞數(shù)少于60，從總分中減去1分。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如instead of，take actions，use...to do，還運(yùn)用了caused to the environment過(guò)去分詞短語(yǔ)作后置定語(yǔ); which引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句等等。并注意了句子的銜接如：Although，In this way等等。不失為一片佳作。