Question

【題目】假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三（1）班的學(xué)生李華。下面四幅圖描述了你們帶留學(xué)生Jack看中醫(yī)（TCM）的經(jīng)歷。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)圖片的先后順序，為�？�“英語(yǔ)角”寫(xiě)一篇短文，介紹你們帶Jack看醫(yī)生前后的全過(guò)程。

注意：詞數(shù)不少于60。

提示詞：把脈 feel one's pulse

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Answer 1

【答案】Last month, we took Jack, an American exchange student who fell ill to a traditional Chinese doctor, which turned out to be an eye-widening experience for him.

It was in a math class that I noticed Jack coughing with a runny nose. Everyone looked at him with concern. Seeing this, one classmate and I offered to take him to the TCM department. He hesitated but followed. At the clinic, the doctor first looked at Jack for a while before feeling his pulse and checking his tongue. The doctor then asked if the cough had been on and off for a long time. In great surprise, Jack nodded his head. The doctor then wrote a prescription with instructions on how to take the medicine.

After boiling the herb medicine at home, I brought it to him in his dormitory. The first taste almost made him throw up. It was really too hard even for me. I comforted him with an old saying “Good medicine to the health tastes bitter to the mouth”. Jack managed to swallow the medicine with a frown. But after a week, when he recovered, he felt amazed at the effect of the Chinese medicine. At a class meeting about the deepest impressions about China, Jack chose “TCM in My Eyes” as the topic. He shared his experience of TCM, from doubt at first to belief in the end.

We all felt inspired and proud hearing a foreigner introducing the profound TCM. I have every reason to believe that with more and more international communication, TCM will be accepted globally and benefit more people in the future.

【解析】這是一篇圖畫(huà)類作文。圖畫(huà)類作文寫(xiě)作首先要認(rèn)真解讀圖畫(huà)，因?yàn)閳D畫(huà)是作文的信息基礎(chǔ)�？忌鷳�(yīng)對(duì)圖畫(huà)進(jìn)行全面而細(xì)致的研究，尤其要注意圖畫(huà)中人或物(人與物)的體貌表情特征和背景，確定人物之間，人物與背景之間的主要關(guān)系，以便正確掌握?qǐng)D畫(huà)所傳達(dá)的信息。第二，除需掌握每一幅圖畫(huà)的信息外，還應(yīng)該對(duì)圖畫(huà)之間的相互聯(lián)系有所理解，在整體上把握?qǐng)D畫(huà)所傳達(dá)的信息。第三，注意圖畫(huà)作文中的文字說(shuō)明。文字說(shuō)明非常重要，通常十分清楚地提供一些寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)，考生在看說(shuō)明時(shí)要看清主、謂、賓，正確理解說(shuō)明的意義。第四，草擬提綱，合理組織材料。根據(jù)圖畫(huà)內(nèi)容的不同采用不同的段落發(fā)展方式。如本篇需要按照事情發(fā)展的順序來(lái)描寫(xiě)。

【范文亮點(diǎn)】

1. 范文采取了條件狀語(yǔ)從句（The doctor then asked if the cough had been on and off for a long time. ）；俗語(yǔ)良藥苦口（Good medicine to the health tastes bitter to the mouth）；時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句（At the clinic, the doctor first looked at Jack for a while before feeling his pulse and checking his tongue. ）等句式。

2. 文章采用了feel one's pulse（把脈 ）；traditional Chinese doctor（中醫(yī)）等高級(jí)單詞或短語(yǔ)。