Question

【題目】Bullying isn’t just confined to the real world. According to the Cyberbullying Research Center, almost half of all young people have been bullied online. Cyberbullying is a form in which people harm other people online deliberately. And unlike the traditional bully, the electronic bully can remain anonymous, so we often don’t know who they are. Cyberbullying includes things like spreading lies and rumors online, sending or forwarding unpleasant message via instant messaging, text or on social networks. It’s becoming very common among teenagers these days. They are campaigns against cyberbullying and some places have adopted laws to prevent it.

Kate is a victim of cyberbully. It’s so bad that she doesn’t want to leave the house. Someone from school has put message on social media saying she’s ugly and she should die. It’s terrible.

【寫作內(nèi)容】

1.用約30個單詞寫出上下文概要；

2.用約120個單詞寫作以下相關(guān)內(nèi)容：

（1）網(wǎng)絡(luò)暴力的原因和影響；

（2）從社會規(guī)范和個人行為談?wù)勅绾螒?yīng)對網(wǎng)絡(luò)暴力。

【寫作要求】

1.發(fā)表觀點時必須提供理由或論據(jù)

2.闡述觀點、提供論據(jù)或敘述經(jīng)歷時，不能直接引用原文語句

3.作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱

【評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】

概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫。

Answer 1

【答案】Cyberbullying issue has been a hard nut to crack, which affects students’ daily life and even brings about psychological problems. The descriptions presented above are typical examples.

Quite a few factors give rise to the hot issue. To begin with, many media online expose children to negative information, especially concerning violence, which will be rooted in children’s heart and mislead them to bullying. Besides, inadequate parental education should also be responsible for their children’s ignorance of laws and indifference to others’ feelings. They will end up appealing to more simple but rude ways to serve their purpose. As a consequence, not only does it endanger children’s physical condition but also causes many mental problems.

From my point of view, there is no simple solution to cyberbullying. Most important of all is proper guidance and monitoring as well as moral education from both schools and parents. It’s only in this way that students can grow up healthily and we may build a harmonious society.

【解析】本文屬于讀寫任務(wù)寫作，動筆前，一定要認(rèn)真閱讀原文，并理解內(nèi)容。認(rèn)真看清題目要求，這篇書面表達(dá)給了一段材料：先要求以約30個詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容，要求有很高的概括提煉的能力，要抓住文章的主題，再以約120個詞寫一篇短文，按照要點去表達(dá)，不能有遺漏。

首先，概括的時候要注意語言的精煉性，要點要齊全。其次，闡述的理由或論據(jù)要簡潔明了，層次分明。最后對自己的觀點作出總結(jié)。

寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)，本文要用一般現(xiàn)在時。上下文意思要連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，因此要使用一些連接詞或詞組。寫作時盡量使用自己會的單詞、詞組和句型，同時也要注意使用一些高級語法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。

亮點：這篇范文要點全面，語言精煉，簡單句和復(fù)雜句交叉使用，在文章中使用了大量的高級詞匯，語言優(yōu)美，條理清楚。開篇使用一個非限制性定語從句簡潔地總結(jié)了本文的要點，Cyberbullying issue has been a hard nut to crack, which affects students’ daily life and even brings about psychological problems。第二段開頭使用固定短語give rise to 點出下文的理由。接著使用一些順序連詞（短語）如“To begin with… Besides, … As a consequence, …”把一整段的內(nèi)容有機(jī)地結(jié)合起來。

第二段中說明理由時句型上也是多變，復(fù)合句與單句交替使用。先使用了定語從句：many media online expose children to negative information, especially concerning violence, which will be rooted in children’s heart and mislead them to bullying. To begin with,）又用了個單句（inadequate parental education should also be responsible for their children’s ignorance of laws and indifference to others’ feelings. They will end up appealing to more simple but rude ways to serve their purpose. （As a consequence, ）再用not only…but also句式（not only does it endanger children’s physical condition but also causes many mental problems.）完美地結(jié)束本段。

最后一段中使用一些詞組From my point of view, Most important of all, build a harmonious society連成一段。在最后一段中又使用了強(qiáng)調(diào)句式（It’s only in this way that students can grow up healthily and we may build a harmonious society.）結(jié)束全文。整個文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整，一氣呵成。