Question

【題目】根據(jù)寫作要求，短文內(nèi)容，寫出一篇連貫完整的短文。詞數(shù)不少于60。

Four teams of mountaineers set out on a race to conquer (征服) an unclimbed mountain peak in the Himalayas. The Canadian team chose a long, but safe route, while the British, Chinese and Russian teams chose a faster but steep and dangerous route up the mountain.

When night fell, the teams made camp on the mountainside. But the next morning, the sun rapidly rose air temperature and the strong wind caused a heavy snowfall, which led to a terrible avalanche. The disaster struck and some members of the British, Chinese and Russian teams were swept away and killed. But the Canadians didn’t know what had happened.

It was an hour after the disaster and there was no hope of finding any survivors. The leaders of the British, Chinese and Russian teams, met to discuss how to successfully keep all the survivors alive.

	Britain	Russia	China
Members	3	2	2
Tents	1 two-man	None	1 four-man
Sleeping bags	3	2	2
Rope	25 metres	50 metres	None
Food	1 person for 3 days	2 people for 4 days	2 people for 2 days
Medicine	None	None	None

The table above was a summary of what they could collect. The leaders made a final decision that they had to find a way to conquer the mountain and put their flags on the peak.

假設(shè)你是領(lǐng)隊之一，請你聯(lián)系加拿大領(lǐng)隊David，告知你們的遭遇和決定，并向?qū)Ψ角笾�。�?nèi)容包括：1. 你們的遭遇及目前的困難；2. 你們的決定及理由；3. 向?qū)Ψ角笾��?/span>

Dear David,

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Yours,

Steve

Answer 1

【答案】Dear David,

I’m the leader of Chinese team. My team, together with British and Russian teams, came across a terrible avalanche so that we lost some of our teammates. We really need your help. At present, there’re 7 people, 3 tents, 7 sleeping bags, 75 meters of rope, some food and no medicine in our three teams, which makes it hard for us to conquer the mountain. Although we have encountered great difficulties, we will not give up and we decide to continue the competition. It is not only because we believe that nothing is impossible in the world, but also because we still have the ability to finish the game. However, we need your team’s help. We will choose your route and hope you can walk so slowly that we can catch up with you on the mountainside. Let’s put our flags on the peak together and wish you good luck. Looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Steve

【解析】

本篇書面表達(dá)屬于應(yīng)用文。要求考生聯(lián)系加拿大領(lǐng)隊David，向其求助，告知David你們的遭遇和面臨的困境，你們決定繼續(xù)攀登，但需要他們的幫助。

第一步：審題

體裁：應(yīng)用文

時態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時

結(jié)構(gòu)：總分法

總分法指把主題句作為總說，把支持句作為分說，并以這種方式安排所寫內(nèi)容。

要求：1. 你們的遭遇及目前的困難；

2. 你們的決定及理由；

3. 向?qū)Ψ角笾��?/span>

第二步:列提綱 （重點(diǎn)詞組）

come across；give up；decide to do sth.；have the ability to do sth.；catch up with sb.

第三步：連詞成句

1. My team, together with British and Russian teams, came across a terrible avalanche so that we lost some of our teammates.

2. we will not give up and we decide to continue the competition.

3. but also because we still have the ability to finish the game.

4. We will choose your route and hope you can walk so slowly that we can catch up with you on the mountainside.

(根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進(jìn)行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。）

第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）

1.表文章結(jié)構(gòu)順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least

2.表并列補(bǔ)充關(guān)系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also

3.表轉(zhuǎn)折對比關(guān)系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause (從句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果關(guān)系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

5表換一種方式表達(dá)：In other words, that is to say,

6.表進(jìn)行舉例說明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing

7.表陳述事實(shí)：In fact, frankly speaking

8.表選擇：either…or…，or

連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰。

第五步：潤色修改