Question

假如你是中學生李華，你的美國朋友Jack在上次給你的電子郵件中抱怨自己最近眼睛近視了。請你給他用英語回一封電子郵件，內(nèi)容如下：
1．介紹一下你們班同學近視的情況； 
2．分析一下造成你們班這種情況的原因；
3．幫Jack出點兒保持眼睛健康的主意。
注：1．字數(shù)110左右；郵件的開頭和結尾已為你寫好。
2．近視：shortsighted  adj.  shortsightedness n.
Dear Jack，
                                                                                   
                                                                                   
Yours sincerely        
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Jack，
I am sorry to hear that you are suffering from shortsightedness too.
To be frank，almost eight students out of ten in my class have to wear glasses to live a normal school life, including me myself. Many factors contribute to this phenomenon. First，we Chinese students live under a great burden of examinations. We have to fight our way in life with millions of peers. Second, most of us with shortsightedness don’t have a good habit of using our eyes，either due to lack of knowledge or carelessness.
In this case, I strongly recommend that you should not use your computer for that long a time any more and that you should change your habit of reading in bed. Hopefully，your shortsightedness could be corrected by wearing proper glasses.
All in all, don’t worry! It’s no big deal!
Yours sincerely
Li Hua

試題分析：考查應用文中的書信的寫作。同時也屬于提綱類作文，話題是眼睛近視的問題，要點都已經(jīng)給出，有分析現(xiàn)狀和原因，給出建議，審題時注意本文使用一般現(xiàn)在時，適當?shù)脑黾蛹毠?jié)，使文章更充實，運用合適的語法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點都準確表述出。難點在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運用省略句，倒裝句和強調(diào)句型準確表述。范文中的劃線的詞或短語都是亮點。
點評：提綱類短文的關鍵在于要點要全面包括，不能有遺漏和省略。同時注意謀篇布局的順序，運用合適的連接詞連接全文，同時選擇高級的詞匯和語法項目讓文章更有文采。