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【題目】繼網(wǎng)絡(luò)購物之后,團(tuán)購熱潮也開始興起。某編輯部正在征集讀者對網(wǎng)購的看法,假如你是李華,請你寫一篇文章談?wù)勀愕目捶ā?/span>

參考詞匯:團(tuán)購 group purchase

注意:1.詞數(shù)120左右;

2.開頭語和結(jié)束語已給出,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Dear editor,

I’m Li Hua, a student from No. 2 middle school.

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

One possible version:

Dear editor,

I’m Li Hua, a student from No. 2 middle school. As for group purchase, I have a right to talk about it because I’m one of those who are wild about it.

Nowadays with the rapid development and increasing popularity of the information technology, the possibility of group purchase has become a reality, which is a fashion especially among the youngsters. It not only saves time but also saves money. It has made our life more convenient and comfortable. We can spend more time and energy on other important things.

But sometimes what we buy doesn’t fit us, so we have to contact the manufacturers and return the goods, which wastes lots of time. At the same time, we also take a risk of items’ damage in the process of delivery.

But in all, I prefer this kind of shopping.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：本篇書面表達(dá)屬于書信類寫作，根據(jù)提示信息和題目要求來展開。寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確有哪些要點(diǎn)。2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象。要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫。3、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)。寫作書信時(shí)一定要注意文章結(jié)構(gòu)和層次，提出建議時(shí)要具有說服力，對于一些常用的動詞，要注意其其他形式以更為簡練的表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)，要靈活運(yùn)用各種短語和從句來豐富文章的內(nèi)容。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種句式和結(jié)構(gòu)。比如Nowadays with the rapid development and increasing popularity of the information technology, the possibility of group purchase has become a reality, which is a fashion especially among the youngsters是with引導(dǎo)的伴隨狀語從句和which引導(dǎo)的定語從句的結(jié)合。It has made our life more convenient and comfortable用it作形式主語。But sometimes what we buy doesn’t fit us, so we have to contact the manufacturers and return the goods, which wastes lots of time是what引導(dǎo)的賓語從句和which引導(dǎo)的非限定性定語從句。此外，文章還使用了大量短語 become a reality , take a risk of, get rid of , fit us等。插入語As for ，At the same time，But in all和not only ......but also 、 I prefer this kind of shopping句型的使用使文章內(nèi)容更具有層次感，也使語言更加連貫。