Question

12．假定英語課上老師要求同桌之間交換修改作文，請你修改你同桌寫的以下作文．文中共有10處語言錯(cuò)誤，每句中最多有兩處．每處錯(cuò)誤僅涉及一個(gè)單詞的增加、刪除或修改．
增加：在缺詞處加一個(gè)漏字符號(hào)（∧），并在其下面寫出該加的詞．
刪除：把多余的詞用斜線（\）劃掉．
修改：在錯(cuò)的詞下劃一橫線，并在該詞下面寫出修改后的詞．
注意：1．每處錯(cuò)誤及其修改均僅限一詞；
2．只允許修改10處，多者（從第11處起）不計(jì)分．
Last Monday，my classmate and I saw some people gathering around in our way to school．In order to see what was happening，so we got close enough and found an old woman lie on the ground．The people around her just stand there，watching and chatting．We were worried about her and decided to take her to the hospital immediate．It turned out th at she lost her balance but fell．She had to stay in hospital，so we called her family．Soon his son came and thanked us by offering us money．We refused money and left．Hurried to school，we found we were late．To our delight though，our teacher praised us for that we had done and we felt very proud．

Answer 1

分析 本文主要講述作者和同學(xué)上學(xué)路上看到一位老太太躺在地上，決定馬上把老人送到醫(yī)院．匆忙趕到學(xué)校時(shí)遲到了，但老師表揚(yáng)了他們，讓他們感到很自豪．

解答 Last Monday，my classmate and I saw some people gathering around in our way to school．In order to see what was happening，so we got close enough and found an old woman lie on the ground．The people around her just stand there，watching and chatting．We were worried about her and decided to take her to the hospital immediate．It turned out that she lost her balance but fell．She had to stay in hospital，so we called her family．Soon his son came and thanked us by offering us money．We refused∧money and left．Hurried to school，we found we were late．To our delight though，our teacher praised us for that we had done and we felt very proud．
1．in改為on 考查介詞．on one's way意為"在…路上"，是固定搭配．
2．去掉so 考查句子結(jié)構(gòu)．In order to see what was happening不是一個(gè)句子，不要用連詞連接．
3．lie改為lying 考查現(xiàn)在分詞．woman與lie之間是主謂關(guān)系，用現(xiàn)在分詞短語lying on the ground作賓語補(bǔ)足語．
4．stand改為stood 考查動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)．全文講述的是已發(fā)生的事情，用一般過去時(shí)．
5．immediate改為immediately 考查副詞．take是動(dòng)詞，要用副詞修飾．
6．but改為and 考查連詞．動(dòng)詞lose和fall是先后關(guān)系，用and連接．
7．his改為her 考查代詞．her指代old woman．
8．refused后加the/his 考查冠詞或代詞．money是第二次提到，用定冠詞the表示特指；或加his進(jìn)行限定．
9．Hurried改為Hurrying 考查現(xiàn)在分詞．we與hurry之間是主謂關(guān)系，用現(xiàn)在分詞短語hurrying to school作狀語．
10．that改為what 考查連詞．do是及物動(dòng)詞，用what作其賓語，同時(shí)引導(dǎo)賓語從句．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 高考短文改錯(cuò)題的形式有說明文，短文故事，書信等，具有很強(qiáng)的實(shí)用性．短文的內(nèi)容和語言都符合高中學(xué)生的實(shí)際，從表面上看類似一篇學(xué)生習(xí)作．首先，通讀全文，了解短文大意，把握全篇的時(shí)態(tài)、人稱及行文邏輯，在通讀全文時(shí)把一些容易的錯(cuò)誤先改好，再進(jìn)行逐句改錯(cuò)．其次，要進(jìn)行逐個(gè)句子的改錯(cuò)．這是要對文中的詞法、句法和語篇著重分析和特別注意．最后把改好的短文再閱讀一遍，檢查答案是否正確，感覺是否還有不妥之處，最終形成定稿．