Question

【題目】你的家鄉(xiāng)是一個依山傍水的小鎮(zhèn)。過去，解放前，這里人們生活極其貧困。但現(xiàn)在人們生活的各個方面都發(fā)生了很大變化。

1. 請根據(jù)下面表格的提示，寫一篇130詞左右的短文，介紹該鎮(zhèn)的變化情況。

2. 靈活運用連貫詞；準確運用時態(tài)、語態(tài)。

3. 適當運用固定短語、搭配、經(jīng)典句型。

人 口	約20萬
面 積	約360平方公里
地理概況	坐落在大山腳下，面臨一條大河，新建有許多工廠、商店、醫(yī)院、學校
教育狀況	解放(liberation)前只有一所學校，只有富家子弟可以上學，現(xiàn)在已建起了10所學校，每個孩子都有機會上學了。
生活狀況	生活豐富多彩，人們工作之余，可以逛商店、看電影、跳舞、參加體育活動等。都過上了幸福生活

Here, I’d like to introduce my hometown.

Answer 1

【答案】

Here I’d like to introduce my hometown.

My hometown is a small town surrounded with mountains and waters. It has a population of more than 200 thousand people and an area of 36 square kilometers. It lies at the foot of a mountain with a big river in front of it.

Before liberation, people lived a hard life. But now great changes have taken place here. As you can see, many factories, shops, hospitals and schools have been built.

The school education has also improved. Before liberation there was only one school. Only the rich children could go to school. Now 10 schools have been set up. Every child has access to school education.

People's lives are colorful. After work they go shopping, see films, go dancing and have sports. Everyone in my hometown lives a happy life. Welcome to my hometown.

【解析】

試題分析：本篇書面表達屬于描寫類作文，根據(jù)提示信息來寫一篇介紹一個小鎮(zhèn)的作文。要注意一下幾點：1、注意雖然題目說是你的家鄉(xiāng)，但是加上要根據(jù)題目所給描述詞，不能脫離題目條件；2、注意時態(tài)語態(tài)和詞匯的用法；3、適當增加自己對這個小鎮(zhèn)的描述，但不能遺漏題目的條件；4、適當使用高級句式，詞匯要多變，給文章增色。

【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構緊湊，描寫細致到位，而且使用了多種句式和結(jié)構。有一些高級句式，如surrounded with mountains and waters是定語從句，with a big river in front of it是介詞短語，lived a hard life、lives a happy life運用了同源賓語的手法。詞匯短語豐富多變，如has a population of有多少人口，an area of占地多少，用于介紹家鄉(xiāng)的地理位置很恰當，As you can see你能看到，has access to能夠干某事，colorful豐富多彩的。結(jié)尾的Welcome to my hometown.表達了對文章讀者的熱情邀請，語氣親切，符合文章主旨。