Question

【題目】假如你是李華，你的英國筆友Mary給你寫了一封信求助。她因為最近學(xué)習(xí)壓力大長胖了，時常被同學(xué)們嘲笑，并且長胖也影響了她自己的健康，因此她感到非常郁悶。請根據(jù)下列要求用英語給她回一封信。要點如下：

1.同情她的處境并安慰她，胖或瘦沒有統(tǒng)一標準；

2.強調(diào)保持健康的重要性；

3.給出保持健康的建議。

注意：1.詞數(shù)100字左右（開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)）

2.可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使文連貫流暢。

Dear Mary,

I’m so glad to hear from you. but ____________________________________________________________

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Yours forever,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mary,

I am so glad to hear from you. but I feel so desperately sorry to learn that you are depressed about some extra weight you have put on recently. To begin with, being fat or slim is merely a matter of personal opinion. With different people holding different views on this subject, there is no agreed standard for an ideal figure. So there is no need for you to worry about. What’s more, it being fit that is the most important for us. Only when you have a healthy body can you live to the fullest. As far as I am concerned, you can do some sports daily by which means you can keep healthy. Most importantly, it is suggested that you should go on a balanced diet at the same time, thus doing good to your health. I hope what I said above can be of great help to you. after all, health is to us what water is to life. I am looking forward to hearing your good news.

Best wishes!

Yours forever,

Li Hua

【解析】試題分析：試題為應(yīng)用文中的書信寫作，試題只給出寫作框架，并未給出所有的具體寫作細節(jié)，為半開放性寫作。寫好此文，需注意三點：一是寫信格式要準確，信的開頭已經(jīng)給出，但切要寫好信的結(jié)尾。二是要詳略得當(dāng)，本文要點如下：1.同情她的處境并安慰她，胖或瘦沒有統(tǒng)一標準；2.強調(diào)保持健康的重要性；3.給出保持健康的建議。三要注意適當(dāng)?shù)卦黾蛹毠?jié)，恰當(dāng)?shù)厥褂眠B接過渡詞，以使行文連貫。另外，在寫作時要注意時態(tài)、語態(tài)的合理運用。

【亮點說明】

本文是一篇書信，格式正確，內(nèi)容符合要求，結(jié)構(gòu)布局合理，句中使用高級句子。I feel so desperately sorry to learn that you are depressed about some extra weight you have put on recently.賓語從句和定語從句完美結(jié)合；To begin with, being fat or slim is merely a matter of personal opinion.獨立成分To begin with,恰到好處；With different people holding different views on this subject, there is no agreed standard for an ideal figure.ｗｉｔｈ的獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)運用經(jīng)典；Only when you have a healthy body can you live to the fullest.部分倒裝在句中體現(xiàn)；it is suggested that you should go on a balanced diet at the same time, thus doing good to your health.主語從句中的虛擬語氣和現(xiàn)在分詞做自然狀語經(jīng)典分層；另外，What’s more，As far as I am concerned, Most importantly,after all,等的運用為文章增色添彩。