Question

【題目】假如你是某中學(xué)的學(xué)生Tom。前不久，你參加了全國英語演講比賽并獲得一等獎。請用英語給校刊寫一篇文章，談?wù)勀愕捏w會。內(nèi)容主要包括：

1．付出才有回報；

2．收獲自信和友誼；

3．感激之情。

注意 1．詞數(shù)100左右；

2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫；

3．開頭語已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)。

Looking back to the National English Speaking Competition I took part in several days ago，I have a lot to share with you．

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Answer 1

【答案】

Looking back to the National English Speaking Competition I took several days ago, I have a lot to share

with you.

For a start, I feel really delighted that I’ve won the first prize in the competition, which makes me understand the true meaning of the proverb “no pains, no gains”. Furthermore, in the five-day competition, I established a close friendship with students from all over our country, from whom I’ve learned a lot. More importantly, taking this competition has enabled me to overcome my fear of speaking in public, thus developing my self-confidence. Additionally, I owe many thanks to my tutor and the judges, without whose proper help, I couldn’t have done such an excellent job.

To sum up, I will always cherish this meaningful and memorable experience.

【解析】

試題分析：

這是一篇提綱類作文。要求學(xué)生用英語給校刊寫一篇文章，發(fā)表一下獲獎感言。寫作內(nèi)容主要包括：付出才有回報；收獲自信和友誼；感激之情。寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)的現(xiàn)象。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞和句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型為文章潤色。注意詞數(shù)在100左右，開頭不計入總詞數(shù)。

亮點說明：賓語從句I feel really delighted that I’ve won the first prize in the competition；非限制性定語從句which makes me understand the true meaning of the proverb “no pains, no gains”.和from whom I’ve learned a lot與without whose proper help...；虛擬語氣without whose proper help, I couldn’t have done such an excellent job.；動名詞做主語taking this competition；現(xiàn)在分詞表結(jié)果thus developing my self-confidence等，語法功底深厚，使作文句式多樣；

連接詞：范文使用For a start, Furthermore, More importantly, Additionally, To sum up等銜接句子和段落，顯得很有條理；

高級詞匯與短語：delighted, establish, enable, overcome, excellent, cherish, memorable, owe...to,等，顯示了較強的詞匯運用能力。