Question

【題目】書面表達

隨著期末考試臨近，許多家長用金錢、旅游等承諾鼓勵孩子努力學習，以后考入好大學。假定你是高二學生李華，請根據所提供的有關信息，給某英文報社寫封短信。

內容要點：

1. 許多家長用金錢、旅游等承諾鼓勵孩子努力學習，以后考入好大學；

2. 可能會導致學生只關注物質獎勵，而減少學習樂趣；

3. 一旦獲得想要的獎勵就失去了學習動力；

4. 你的建議。

注意：

1. 不要逐詞逐句地翻譯。

2. 為使語句連貫，可以適當增加細節(jié)。

3. 詞數100左右。短信開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總數。

Dear Editor,

With the final examination approaching,__________________________

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Yours truly

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Editor,

With the final examination approaching, many parents try to encourage their children to study hard and be admitted into a famous university in the near future. They promise that they will be rewarded with things such as money, traveling and so on once they achieve the goals.

However, I don't think this is a proper way. Firstly, it may lead to the fact that children's attention will focus on such things instead of the pleasure of studying. Secondly, they may stop working hard as soon as they get what they want.

I think a wise way is to make us aware of the importance of going to a good university. We should also study hard and well for our future.

Yours truly

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：本書面表達是一篇提綱作文。提綱作文寫作的時候注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確有哪些要點。2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象。要依據提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫。3、根據要表達的內容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；語言表達要符合英語習慣。

【亮點說明】范文中運用一些常用短語：be admitted into意為：被···錄��；be rewarded with意為：被回報···；be aware of 意為：明白···，知道···；除此之外還運用了一些高級句式，例如：With the final examination approaching,這里使用了with的復合結構；it may lead to the fact that children's attention will focus on such things instead of the pleasure of studying.這里面包含了一個同位語從句。另外，范文還恰當地運用了過渡詞語，這些都是值得學習的亮點。