Question

9．A peacock was very unhappy with his ugly voice； and he spent most of his days complaining about it．
"It is true that you cannot sing；"said the fox，"but look how beautiful you are!"
"Oh，but what good is all this beauty；"cried the bird，"with such an unpleasant voice!"
"Listen，"said the fox，"each one owns something good； you have such beauty； the nightingale has his song； and the owl has his eyes．Even if you had a sweet voice，you would still complain about another thing．Why can't you just be happy about what you have already got？"
【寫作內(nèi)容】
1、以約30個詞概括短文的主要內(nèi)容；
2、以約120個詞就"停止抱怨并珍惜自己所擁有的"這一主題發(fā)表你的看法，內(nèi)容包括：
（1）你或你身邊的人的類似事例；        （2）談?wù)勀銓υ撝黝}的看法．
【寫作要求】
1、在作文中可以自己的親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2、文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱．

Answer 1

分析 （高分句型一）But he never realizes that his parents love him so much，and how beautifully he can play the violin，which makes him the envy of his classmates．
該句型首先在realize后加兩個賓語從句，分別是that…和how…；which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句，充當(dāng)句子的主語；
（高分句型二）Many people around us focus on what they want instead of what they have．
what放在on后面是一個介詞的賓語從句，很多人都集中在他們想要的而不是他們有的；
高級詞匯：focus on 集中于；dissatisfied不滿意的；stay positive保持樂觀；

解答 This story is about a peacock who complained about his ugly voice while actually he is very beautiful．A fox advised him to be content with what he was blessed with．（30個詞概括總結(jié)）
     The peacock reminds of my friend Mike，who is always upset．He complained his parents are too busy to stay at home with him，He complains he is too short to play basketball well．（高分句型一）But he never realizes that his parents love him so much，and how beautifully he can play the violin，which makes him the envy of his classmates．（舉例子）
      （高分句型二）Many people around us focus on what they want instead of what they have．As a result of their endless desires，they are often dissatisfied．In my opinion，we should stay positive and value what we have instead of complaining too much．If we remain grateful for what we already have and what we can fulfill，we may live a happier life．（我的看法）

點評 讀寫任務(wù)型寫作是將閱讀與寫作有機結(jié)合，要求考生既能讀懂文章信息，又要依據(jù)要求規(guī)范連貫地表達內(nèi)容，其中準(zhǔn)確概括很有挑戰(zhàn)且十分重要，根據(jù)記敘文、議論文、說明文等不同文體作相應(yīng)概括，總的來說，遵循以下步驟：確定主題句；尋找關(guān)鍵詞；重構(gòu)主題句；重組支持句．寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．