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【題目】請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面的英文短詩展開合理想象，寫一篇介紹人物的文章。標(biāo)題為：My Teacher, Mr Moore。注意：詞數(shù)100左右。

My Teacher, Mr Moore

There is a teacher Mr Moore，

Who is lovely and thirty－four，

Always encouraging us to try，

He leads us to a world of “why”，

We all admire him more and more.

My Teacher, Mr Moore

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Answer 1

【答案】My Teacher, Mr Moore

Of all my teachers, Mr Moore is the one who impresses me most.Though he is 34, he looks very young for his age.And he's one of the most popular teachers in our school.

Compared with other teachers, Mr Moore pays more attention to his approaches of teaching.He tries various ways to make his classes lively and interesting.In his opinion, not only should we know “what”， but we should understand “why”．So, instead of giving us answers immediately, he encourages us to think by ourselves whenever he puts forward questions.Under his direction, we've learned how to analyze and solve problems. What a wonderful world of “why” he leads us to!

He is such a learned person that we all admire him very much.

【解析】

這是一篇給材料作文，介紹自己的老師。本題所給材料是關(guān)于你的老師的小詩，故動(dòng)筆前一定要讀懂詩歌，然后結(jié)合詩歌內(nèi)容適當(dāng)發(fā)揮想象將詩歌內(nèi)容表達(dá)完全，注意不要遺漏材料中給出的要點(diǎn)。寫作前先結(jié)合要表達(dá)的事情確定句子的人稱時(shí)態(tài)，盡量不犯語法錯(cuò)誤。注意上下文之間的邏輯關(guān)系，語意連貫。

本文的寫作符合題目要求，內(nèi)容完整，人物描寫恰當(dāng)。本文中的句式非常靈活多變，簡單句與復(fù)合句相結(jié)合。其中復(fù)合句運(yùn)用的恰當(dāng)，尤其是狀語從句。文中運(yùn)用的句式及語法有：

定語從句Mr Moore is the one who impresses me most.和狀語從句最我，由though引導(dǎo)的狀語Though he is 34, he looks very young for his age；由whenever引導(dǎo)的狀語從句he encourages us to think by ourselves whenever he puts forward questions；和以及由such…that…引導(dǎo)的狀語從句He is such a learned person that we all admire him very much.。以及由what引導(dǎo)的感嘆句What a wonderful world of “why” he leads us to!句中還有非謂語作狀語Compared with other teachers, Mr Moore pays more attention to his approaches of teaching；還有由not only…,but also…引導(dǎo)的并列句運(yùn)用了部分倒裝：In his opinion, not only should we know “what”， but we should understand “why”。