Question

13．假設(shè)你是一名高中生，名叫李華．因為老師擔(dān)心同學(xué)們?yōu)g覽不健康的網(wǎng)站，學(xué)校關(guān)閉了電腦教室的上網(wǎng)功能，同學(xué)們感到很郁悶．請你給校長寫一封建議信．內(nèi)容包括：
1．無法上網(wǎng)給學(xué)生帶來的不便；
2．網(wǎng)絡(luò)的必要性（幫助解決學(xué)習(xí)難題、獲取最新信息；）
3．就老師的擔(dān)心發(fā)表你的看法．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．信的開頭和結(jié)尾部分已經(jīng)給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
Dear headmaster，
I'm writing to request you to allow us to surf the Internet in the computer classroom．                        
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是書信類作文，請你給校長寫一封建議信，反映學(xué)校關(guān)閉電腦教室的上網(wǎng)功能的事情．文章的要點也基本上都給出來了，但不是很具體，考生要把要點解釋清楚，不能有遺漏．而且要拓展內(nèi)容，不能太空泛，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次．同時在列舉措施的時候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second，Besides，What's more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢．本篇文章在寫作時不要啰嗦，力求簡潔．
【亮點說明】所給范文語言簡潔，應(yīng)用了一些較好的詞組和句子：As far as I am concerned，據(jù)我所知，search for尋找，come across遇到，take …into consideration把..考慮在內(nèi)，we cannot use the computer in the computer classroom to get on line，which makes us very upset because we can't search for the information we need or read news．這句話用了兩個定語從句，surfing the Internet can benefit us in many ways．這句話用動名詞做主語，we can search for answers to some problems that we come across in our studies．這句話也用了定語從句，it is necessary for us to learn about the latest news．這句話用了it做形式主語，I do hope you can take my suggestion into consideration and make a final decision．這句話用了強調(diào)句．還有范文使用了First of all，Second，More importantly，這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫．
Right now，we cannot use the computer in the computer classroom to get on line，which makes us very upset because we can't search for the information we need or read news．（高分句型一）
As far as I am concerned，surfing the Internet can benefit us in many ways．（高分句型二）
I do hope you can take my suggestion into consideration and make a final decision．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear headmaster，
      I'm writing to request you to allow us to surf the Internet in the computer classroom．Right now，we cannot use the computer in the computer classroom to get on line，which makes us very upset because we can't search for the information we need or read news．（高分句型一）
      As far as I am concerned，surfing the Internet can benefit us in many ways．（高分句型二）First of all，we can search for answers to some problems that we come across in our studies．Second，it is necessary for us to learn about the latest news．More importantly，we are no longer children now，so we are able to control our behavior．I promise we won't visit unhealthy websites．
       I do hope you can take my suggestion into consideration and make a final decision．（高分句型三）
                                                                                                                                                                                                                            Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                            Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．