Question

12．假定你是李華，計(jì)劃組織一次郊游，請(qǐng)給你的英國朋友Chris寫封郵件邀請(qǐng)他參加．內(nèi)容包括：
1．參加者；
2．時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)；
3．活動(dòng)：登山、野餐等．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)80左右；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Chris，
I am sincerely inviting you to join us to go for an outing this weekend．Aiming to enhance our relation and build up our bodies，the trip involves climbing mountains and a picnic．（高分句型一）（活動(dòng)：登山、野餐等）As is scheduled，the activity will take place at 8：00am on Saturday at the gate of our school and we hope all the students in our class will take an activite part in it．（高分句型二）（參加者、時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)）Climbing is an important part of the trip．While pushing our strength to the limit，we are also breathing fresh air and appreciating the gorgeous scenery on the way．（高分句型三）
Hope you won't miss the joyful activity．Your attendance is greatly expected．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息計(jì)劃組織一次郊游，請(qǐng)給你的英國朋友Chris寫封郵件邀請(qǐng)他參加，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：參加者；時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)；活動(dòng)：登山、野餐等．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】文章開頭：表明寫信目的，可套用句式如"I am cordially/sincerely inviting you to join us …．
　　文章中間：描述活動(dòng)信息（時(shí)間/地點(diǎn)/參與者/活動(dòng)內(nèi)容/活動(dòng)目的或意義）．
　　①目的引出句，可使用非謂語句式，如"Aiming to（套用亮點(diǎn)詞，如增進(jìn)聯(lián)系enhance relationship/強(qiáng)身健體build up bodies），the trip involves …"；
　�、跁r(shí)間、地點(diǎn)的引出句，如"As is scheduled，the activity will take place …"．
　�、刍顒�(dòng)內(nèi)容適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，根據(jù)所給關(guān)鍵詞擴(kuò)寫成句．如，"爬山是這次出游的重要環(huán)節(jié)．在挑戰(zhàn)體力的同時(shí)，我們能呼吸新鮮的空氣，領(lǐng)略到沿途美麗的風(fēng)光．"Climbing is an important part of the trip．While pushing our strength to the limit，we are also breathing fresh air and appreciating the gorgeous scenery on the way．
　　文章結(jié)尾：再次歡迎對(duì)方參加．可套用句式如，"Hope you won't miss the joyful activity．Your attendance is greatly expected．"

解答 Dear Chris，
      I am sincerely inviting you to join us to go for an outing this weekend．Aiming to enhance our relation and build up our bodies，the trip involves climbing mountains and a picnic．（高分句型一）（活動(dòng)：登山、野餐等）As is scheduled，the activity will take place at 8：00 am on Saturday at the gate of our school and we hope all the students in our class will take an activite part in it．（高分句型二）（參加者、時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)）Climbing is an important part of the trip．While pushing our strength to the limit，we are also breathing fresh air and appreciating the gorgeous scenery on the way．（高分句型三）
      Hope you won't miss the joyful activity．Your attendance is greatly expected．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                     Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                      Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 提綱類在寫作時(shí)要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點(diǎn)，寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時(shí)需要積累短語和重要句型．