Question

【題目】假如你是紅星中學(xué)高三學(xué)生李華。你的美國(guó)筆友Chris在給你郵件中提到他最近在準(zhǔn)備SAT考試（美國(guó)高考），心理壓力很大，很苦惱，希望得到你的幫助。請(qǐng)你給他回信，內(nèi)容包括：

1．安慰對(duì)方；

2．分析心理壓力過大會(huì)導(dǎo)致的后果；

3．給出相應(yīng)的建議及其理由。

注意：詞數(shù)不少于100。

Dear Chris,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Chris,

I’m sorry to learn that you’ve been under a lot of pressure lately due to the upcoming SAT test. Anyone in your situation would suffer a certain amount of stress. But don’t worry too much, or you may find yourself problems with sleep, appetite, or even memory. Here are some ways I think that can deal with stress.

The first thing you can try is to exercise. Exercises like walking or running not only boost energy but also build confidence. Another way is to enjoy some games with friends, which can take your mind off the stress and make you more relaxed. It might also be a good idea to talk to someone who is a good listener; having someone to listen to your problems can make you feel better.

I believe it will all work out. Cheer up! Let me know if I can help further.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】這是一篇提綱類作文。你的美國(guó)筆友由于備考?jí)毫�過大，苦惱的他希望得到你的幫助，對(duì)此，需要給他回一封信。

信的稱謂已經(jīng)給出，第一段首先要安慰朋友，不要讓他過于焦慮，并告訴他壓力過大導(dǎo)致的后果。第二段給出一些具體的減輕壓力的方法，以及這樣做的理由。最后一段是鼓勵(lì)朋友的話。

文章內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)已經(jīng)給出。但考生在寫這篇文章時(shí)，要注意以下幾點(diǎn)：

1. 這封信主要是向壓力過大的朋友提供幫助，所以以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主。

2. 要點(diǎn)要齊全。但是不要對(duì)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行簡(jiǎn)單的羅列�？梢允褂眠m當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞，使上下文行文流暢，銜接自然流暢。

3. 注意文章的結(jié)構(gòu)要清晰，細(xì)節(jié)把控要到位。給出的建議要附帶上相應(yīng)的理由，否則會(huì)顯得說服力不夠，內(nèi)容不夠豐滿。此外，要注意信件的寫作格式。

【范文亮點(diǎn)】

優(yōu)秀詞匯和短語：upcoming即將到來的，suffer遭受，appetite食欲，deal with處理，boost energy增強(qiáng)精力，build confidence建立信心，take your mind off思想放空，cheer up振奮起來

優(yōu)秀句式和行文脈絡(luò)：

1.Another way is to enjoy some games with friends, which can take your mind off the stress and make you more relaxed另外一個(gè)方法是和朋友一起享受游戲，這可以幫你減輕思想上的壓力，讓你更加放松。（運(yùn)用了to do 不定式作表語，運(yùn)用了which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句）

2.全文運(yùn)用了The first thing，Another way，also這些連接詞使行文流暢。而且全文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，最后還寫了振奮朋友精神的話，作為一封給朋友提供幫助的信件，這些細(xì)節(jié)處理的很好。