Question

就“中國首次載入航天飛行圓滿成功”這一主題寫一篇小短文．

要求：1．行文流暢，敘述清楚，層次分明．

2．內(nèi)容豐富，材料真實，感情真摯；

3．詞數(shù)200個左右．

Answer 1

答案：
解析：

例文： The great dream has come true! 　　The exciting and splendid moment has come!After a landmark 21-hour and 23-minute space flight that took him around the globe 14 times, China's first astronaut Yang Liwei returned to the earth safely．When I watched the exciting news on TV, my eyes was① filled with exciting tears．China has realized a many-centuries-old② dream cherished by all the Chinese． 　　As the inventor of the ancient rocket, we fell behind in the space exploration in the modern history．More than forty years ago, USSR(Russia)succeed③ in sending up the first manned spaceship．In 1969, the American astronauts visited the moon． 　　Not until 1970 did China send up the first satellite． 　　Since the reform and opening-up in the 1980's, however, our country has made great achievements in science and technology． 　　Within five years, we succeeded in sending up for unmanned spaceships, laying a solid foundation for the manned space flight．Now, the Shenzhou V．marks a great leap forward in China's space flight． 　　I believe in the near future, China will have the permanent space station of its own like one④ of Russia and China's astronauts will walk in space and on the moon! 　　China, we feel proud of you．China, I love you! 修改： 　�、賥as→were 　�、赾enturies→century復(fù)合形容詞中，名詞用單數(shù)形式． 　　③succeed→succeeded時態(tài)錯誤． 　�、躱ne→that這里是特指． 點評： 　　作者以真摯的感情，飽滿的熱情，講述了中國艱難的航天歷程，謳歌了中國在航天領(lǐng)域里所取得的巨大成就．文章敘述清楚，條理清晰，層次分明，過渡自然．值得一提的是，作者使用了一定數(shù)量的復(fù)雜句子結(jié)構(gòu)，這一點非�？扇。�但如果作者把自身的感受多談一點，文章可能會更好．