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【題目】現(xiàn)在越來越多的人成為低頭族（People who can’t help checking their phones all day are known as phubbers. Phubbing trends to involve not only the young people, but also the elderly.)，如何引導(dǎo)低頭族抬頭？你們班舉行了以“拒為低頭族”為主題的班會。假設(shè)你是學(xué)生李華，請為班會寫一篇100詞左右的發(fā)言稿，題目所給英文不計(jì)入總字?jǐn)?shù)。

要點(diǎn)如下：

1. 你周圍有低頭族嗎？他們成為“低頭族”的原因。

2. 成為“低頭族”給學(xué)習(xí)和生活帶來的影響。

3. 就如何“拒為低頭族”提一些建議。

phubbers(低頭族) Phubbing(低頭玩手機(jī)的行為)

Answer 1

【答案】Nowadays, we can see many people are watching their mobile phones in subway, restaurants, elevators, roads and so on. There is no denying that people who like the mobile phone are concerned about its attractive functions. Phubbers can’t stop sending messages, surfing the Internet, listening to music and even taking photos by using the mobile phone. Moreover, some people have less time to relax themselves. They make use of the time when they are on the way to school or other places to play mobile games.

However, phubbing disturbs not only our study but also our life. On the one hand, phubbers waste lots of time playing cell phone games and sending messages, particularly in class. Other people also complain they are disturbed when phones ring in classrooms. On the other hand, it can lead to health problems. For instance, using a mobile phone on the sofa can cause back and neck pain.

As far as I am concerned, it is high time that we threw away the phone and raised our heads up. Do cherish everything around us and appreciate the scenery ahead of us. What’s more, we should do more exercises and take part in real-life activities. In a word, only when we use the phone reasonably, can we realize the happiness of life.

【解析】本文屬于提綱式作文。高考中提綱式作文非常常見。寫提綱式作文要注意以下幾點(diǎn)。

1．審題。要弄清題意，確定文章的中心思想、主題，并圍繞中心思想組織材料。

2．進(jìn)行構(gòu)思，列出簡單的提綱，安排好層次段落，鋪設(shè)好過渡，處理好開頭和結(jié)尾。

3．?dāng)U展成文。擴(kuò)展成文時(shí)還需：1）確保提綱中段落結(jié)構(gòu)的思路與各段主題句的一致性；2）要靈活運(yùn)用各種句式，如倒裝句、強(qiáng)調(diào)句、省略句、主從復(fù)合句、分詞短語、介詞短語等，從而增加文章的可讀性。注意使用高級框架結(jié)構(gòu)的句子，讓文章的結(jié)構(gòu)錯(cuò)落有致。避免只是用一兩個(gè)句式或重復(fù)用同一詞語；3）用好連接詞，注意段落間、句子間的連貫性。

亮點(diǎn)分析：本文內(nèi)容完整，句式靈活多變，既有簡單句又有復(fù)雜句。運(yùn)用了多種句式，有定語從句，名詞從句，狀語從句，倒裝句，非謂語等，還有大量高級詞匯和高級句式的運(yùn)用，表達(dá)到位，語言優(yōu)美，內(nèi)容豐富。同時(shí)使用了大量的連詞，使文章層次分明，渾然一體。

在第一段中點(diǎn)明我們周圍的“低頭族”隨處可見。接著用一個(gè)復(fù)雜句There is no denying that people who like the mobile phone are concerned about its attractive functions.點(diǎn)出了成為“低頭族”的主要原因。而這個(gè)復(fù)雜句中既有一個(gè)名詞從句又有一個(gè)定語從句。接著用非謂語完成了一個(gè)較長的句子，Phubbers can’t stop sending messages, surfing … listening …and even taking … by using t…來陳述低頭族的原因，再用連詞“Moreover”點(diǎn)出另一個(gè)原因時(shí)用了一個(gè)單句+狀語從句(they make use of the time when they are on the way to school or other places to play mobile games.)

第二段首先用not only…but also…陳述成為“低頭族”給學(xué)習(xí)和生活帶來的影響。接著用連詞“on the one hand…on the other hand…”把一段內(nèi)容有機(jī)地結(jié)合起來。在這一段中使用了復(fù)雜句句：Other people also complain they are disturbed when phones ring in classrooms.和非謂語動(dòng)詞作主語：using a mobile phone on the sofa can cause back and neck pain.

第三段就如何“拒為低頭族”提一些建議。在本段中使用了一些高級詞匯及句式。如高級詞匯As far as I am concerned, What’s more, . o more exercises and take part in ，in a word,高級句式，如虛擬語氣“it is high time that we threw away the phone and raised our heads up.”祈使句+and+祈使句，以及由only when引起的倒裝句：only when we use the phone reasonably, can we realize the happiness of life.。