Question

【題目】假如你是李越, 你的朋友John喜歡玩網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲, 學習成績明顯受到影響。 作為朋友, 請你寫一封信, 勸告他遠離電腦游戲, 回歸正常生活。要點如下：

1. 玩網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲的危害(至少兩點)；

2. 你的建議(至少兩點)；

注意：詞數(shù)120左右 提示詞：虛擬世界 virtual world

Dear John，

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Best wishes.

Yours，

Li Yue

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear John,

How are you doing recently? You failed the English test this week again, which made me deeply worried about you. I know how attractive the online games are and I also know it isn’t easy to break away from a habit, but it is high time that you took action and got rid of it.

You can’t deny the fact that online games do harm to us adolescents. Firstly, playing online games does damage to your health. For example, watching the screen for a long time is bad for your eyes. Secondly, your academic performance will suffer from online games. Due to a lack of self-control, you’ve got addicted to it. As a result, you can’t focus your attention in class, which accounts for your failure in exams.

Here is some advice for you and I hope you’ll find it helpful. First of all, make a plan to quit and stick to it. Each time you feel like playing online games, do something else instead, like listening to music or doing sports with your friends. Secondly, reward yourself with any progress you make. It is also a good choice to turn to others for help if necessary.

As the saying goes, nothing is impossible for a willing heart. I'm confident that you can break the bad habit.

Best wishes.

Yours,

Li Yue

【解析】

試題分析：本篇要求寫一封信，根據(jù)提示信息來寫。寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確有哪些要點。2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象。要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫。3、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)。 4.注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點。

【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，而且使用了多種句式和結(jié)構(gòu)。文章第一段中的“You failed the English test this week again, which made me deeply worried about you.”使用了非限制性定語從句，意思是你這周的英語考試又一次不及格，這讓我很是擔心你。“I know how attractive the online games are”使用了“how+形容詞+be”的感嘆句式，意思是我知道網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲是多么的受歡迎。“but it is high time that you took action and got rid of it.”中使用了“it is high time that sb. did sth.”的固定句型，意思是是某人該做某事的時間了。第二段中“watching the screen for a long time is bad for your eyes”中使用了動名詞短語作主語，意思是長時間看著屏幕對眼睛有害。本文還使用了大量短語，get rid of 消除， do harm to對……有害，suffer from受……的折磨，due to由于，accounts for歸因于，As the saying goes俗話說。Firstly, First of all ,secondly,這些序數(shù)詞的應(yīng)用使文章條理更清晰，更緊湊。