Question

【題目】（二十四）

假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三(1)班的學(xué)生李華，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，為�？�

“英語(yǔ)園地”寫一篇短文，記述你和同學(xué)們今年為老師慶祝教師節(jié)的過(guò)程。

注意：1．詞數(shù)不少于60；

2．短文的開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

We had a special Teachers' Day this year.

（請(qǐng)務(wù)必將作文寫在答題卡指定區(qū)域內(nèi)）

Answer 1

【答案】

One possible version：

We had a special Teachers’ Day this year.

Several days before Teachers' Day, some of my classmates and I had a group meeting in order to decide how we could celebrate it. My classmate came up with the idea of making a short video, so a few hours after the meeting we went outside and filmed it in front of the school entrance. The evening before Teachers' Day, I edited the movie on my computer and added some music. When we eventually showed everybody the video on Teachers' Day, our teacher was very moved and the rest of the class really enjoyed it.

【解析】

試題分析：本文是一篇圖畫作文，要求以李華的名義記敘同學(xué)們今年為老師慶祝教師節(jié)的過(guò)程。根據(jù)圖畫式作文的要求，本篇書面表達(dá)應(yīng)該寫成記敘文，可以按照時(shí)間順序來(lái)進(jìn)行行文。寫作時(shí)要注意記敘文的六要素，包括時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物、事件、結(jié)果等。因?yàn)槭怯洈⑦^(guò)去的事情所以文章要使用一般過(guò)去時(shí)，第一人稱。而且要注意充分發(fā)揮想象來(lái)充實(shí)文章內(nèi)容，使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞以使文章層次分明，條理清晰。此外，還要注意高級(jí)詞匯和多種句式的使用，以提高寫作檔次。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文范文內(nèi)容完整，語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確，條理清楚，時(shí)態(tài)和人稱使用正確，字?jǐn)?shù)符合要求，是一篇不錯(cuò)的作文。文章的亮點(diǎn)是高級(jí)句式的使用，在文中作者使用了賓語(yǔ)從句 how we could celebrate it.時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句When we eventually showed everybody the video on Teachers' Day和并列句so a few hours after the meeting we went outside and filmed it in front of the school entrance.等。此外，edit the movie, have a group meeting , come up with , 等短語(yǔ)也增加了文章的亮點(diǎn)。