Question

15．某英語報(bào)社向中學(xué)生征文，請你以"我理想的職業(yè)"為標(biāo)題，根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)完成短文．
1、職業(yè)特點(diǎn)；
2、選擇的理由；
3、目前做何準(zhǔn)備．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．文章標(biāo)題已給出．
My ideal job．I often imagine what I will be in the future．I hope I will work in a computer company as a program designer because I like designing the computer program and I will make enough time．I will enjoy my work and get along well with my colleagues．I will do a good job in whatever I do．
I also hope that I won't be very busy so that I can spare time to company with my families．In my free time，I will contribute to take regular exercise，such asswimming，running and various ball games．
For my future ideal job，I am making every effort to make it．No matter how hard it is，I will go on trying hard and never give it up．．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文，根據(jù)所提供的材料，寫一篇征文，題目是"我理想的職業(yè)"．寫作要點(diǎn)包括：職業(yè)的特點(diǎn)；選擇的理由；目前做何準(zhǔn)備．寫作時(shí)應(yīng)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般將來時(shí)為主．人稱以第一人稱為主．重要短語：in the future （將來），a program designer （程序設(shè)計(jì)員），get along well with（相處很好），do a good job（做得很棒），spare time （騰出時(shí)間），company with （陪伴），make every effort to do sth （努力做某事），make it （做成功）．

解答 My ideal job
      I often imagine what I will be in the future．I hope I will work in a computercompany as a program designer because I like designing the computer program andI will make enough time．【高分句型】I will enjoy my work and get along well with my colleagues．I will do a good job in whatever I do．（職業(yè)特點(diǎn)）
      I also hope that I won't be very busy so that I can spare time to company with myfamilies．In my free time，I will contribute to take regular exercise，such asswimming，running and various ball games．（選擇的理由）
      For my future ideal job，I am making every effort to make it．No matter how hard it is，I will go on trying hard and never giveit up．【高分句型】（目前做何準(zhǔn)備）

點(diǎn)評 提綱作文在寫作時(shí)要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點(diǎn)，并適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)．寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時(shí)需注意積累短語和重要句型．