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4．根據(jù)最新頒布的《關(guān)于加強和改進普通高中學(xué)生綜合素質(zhì)評價的意見》，你校舉辦校園之星（Star of the Campus）評選活動，你班李華獲此殊榮．請你根據(jù)以下提示用英語寫一篇短文，介紹李華的綜合素質(zhì)情況．
高中學(xué)生綜合素質(zhì)評價思想品德學(xué)業(yè)水平身心健康藝術(shù)素養(yǎng)社會實踐

要求：1．短文內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括綜合素質(zhì)的五個方面，但不得逐字翻譯；
2．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實姓名、校名和地名；
3．詞數(shù)120左右．開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
Being an excellent student with all-round development，Li Huahas been honored asStar of the Campus．
He spends most of his spare time doing volunteer work atweekends，helping the old or the disabled，which shows his character of responsibility and kindness．With great intelligence，diligence，good learning methods andpositive attitudes，he studies well in all the subjects and often ranks among the top threein the class．After class，he is active in the playground，music clubs and some communities．The sport he likes most isplaying basketball and he has served as leader of our school basketball teamfor two years．He also takesgreat delightin Chinese opera as well assinging pop songs．Besides，he takes an active part in all sorts of social practices．
In a word，Li Hua is an outstanding student，who has set a good examplefor us．．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇圖表+提綱式作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，介紹李華的綜合素質(zhì)情況，寫一篇短文．
寫作要點包括：1．思想品德；2．學(xué)業(yè)水平；3．身心健康；4．藝術(shù)素養(yǎng)；5社會實踐；．
寫作時時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主，人稱以第三人稱為主．
重要短語：all-rounddevelopment （全面發(fā)展），be honored as （榮獲），spend time doing （花費時間做…），rank among the top three（排名前三），serve as（作為，充當(dāng)），take great delight in （以…為樂），take an active partin （積極參加），in a word （總之），set a good example for （為…樹立榜樣）．
【高分句型】
1．Being an excellent student with all-round development，Li Hua has been honored as Star of the Campus．
這里是現(xiàn)在分詞being作原因狀語，主句的主語LiHua與動詞be存在邏輯上的主動關(guān)系．
2．He spends most of his spare time doing volunteer work at weekends，①helping the old or the disabled，②which shows his character of responsibility and kindness．
①這里是現(xiàn)在分詞helping作方式狀語，主句的主語he與所給動詞help構(gòu)成邏輯上的主動關(guān)系．
②這里是which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句，which在從句中作主語，指代前面整個主句的內(nèi)容He spends most of his spare time doing volunteer work at weekends，helping the old or the disabled．

解答 Beingan excellent student with all-round development，Li Hua hasbeen honored as Star of the Campus．【高分句型】（開頭）
He spends most of his spare time doing volunteer work atweekends，helping the old or the disabled，which shows his character of responsibility and kindness．【高分句型】（思想品德）With great intelligence，diligence，good learning methods and positive attitudes，he studies well in all thesubjects and often ranks among the top three in the class．（學(xué)業(yè)水平） After class，he is active in theplayground，music clubs and some communities．The sport he likes most is playing basketball and he hasserved as leader of our school basketball team for two years．（身心健康）He also takes great delight in Chinese opera aswell as singing pop songs．（藝術(shù)素養(yǎng)） Besides，he takes an active part in all sorts of social practices．（社會實踐）
In a word，Li Hua is an outstanding student，who has set a good examplefor us．【高分句型】（總結(jié)概括）

點評 寫好這類圖片及提綱式作文的關(guān)鍵是認真分析所給提示信息，靈活運用英語知識，采用不同的表達方式將要點完整地表述出來，并認真看圖，圍繞主題，提煉要點，發(fā)揮想象，語言力求準確、簡潔．選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性．同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，最后還要認真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標(biāo)點誤用等．