Question

7．以下是網(wǎng)上走紅的"低碳哥"的基本情況．

時(shí)    間：2011年． 人物介紹："低碳哥"，用行動(dòng)宣講環(huán)保概念的年輕人，主張少用能源，減少二氧化碳的排放． 主要做法：1．撿起廢紙，用空白一面寫字；                              2．不開燈看電視，還把電視亮度調(diào)到最低（minimum）；        3．上班騎自行車，不開車等． 人們的看法：做秀，不現(xiàn)實(shí)． 你的看法：我完全支持他的想法和行為，盡管他的行為未能對(duì)全球氣候變暖造成很大的影響，但他至少可以享受健康的生活．

寫作內(nèi)容
根據(jù)以上"低碳哥"的基本情況寫一篇介紹，內(nèi)容包括：
1、"低碳哥"的簡(jiǎn)要介紹及走紅的時(shí)間；
2、他的主要做法及人們的看法
3、你的看法
寫作要求
只能使用5個(gè)句子表達(dá)全部?jī)?nèi)容．
評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)
句子結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫．
參考詞匯：低碳哥Low-carbon Brother   二氧化碳 carbon dioxide．

Answer 1

分析 本文為提綱類的人物傳記作文，要求學(xué)生描述人物的事跡以及眾人的評(píng)價(jià)，最后表達(dá)自己對(duì)該人物的一種看法．寫作時(shí)一定要注意題干的要求，必須使用5個(gè)句子來(lái)完成本篇文章的寫作，這就對(duì)學(xué)生的構(gòu)詞和造句提出了更高的要求．審題時(shí)注意本文主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，人稱以第三人稱為主，表達(dá)個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)時(shí)用第一人稱．
重要短語(yǔ)：
become a hit one（man）成為轟動(dòng)一時(shí)的人物；suggest doing sth建議做某事，mean doing sth意味著做某事，pick up撿起，拾起，turn down調(diào)低，turn off關(guān)閉，instead of代替，而不是，as far as sb be concerned就某人個(gè)人而言，have an effect on對(duì)…有影響．
高分句型：
1．A young man called Low-carbon Brother became a hit one on the Internet in 2011，who suggests living a low carbon life，which means using less energy in our daily life so that we can help reduce carbon dioxide in the air．這是一個(gè)復(fù)雜的主從復(fù)合句，句子含有who和which引導(dǎo)的兩個(gè)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，其中主句的主語(yǔ)A young man后面有一個(gè)過(guò)去分詞短語(yǔ)called Low-carbon Brother作后置定語(yǔ)；在which引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句中又有一個(gè)so that引導(dǎo)的目的狀語(yǔ)從句．
2．Some people think that what he is doing is just a show and impractical．本句中that引導(dǎo)的為一個(gè)賓語(yǔ)從句，在賓語(yǔ)從句中又含有一個(gè)what引導(dǎo)的主語(yǔ)從句．
3．But as far as I am concerned，I strongly support his idea and his behavior because although what he is doing has no huge effect on global warming，he at least can enjoy a healthy life這是一個(gè)由because引導(dǎo)的原因狀語(yǔ)從句，在從句中又含有although引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語(yǔ)從句，而在讓步狀語(yǔ)從句中what he is doing屬于what引導(dǎo)的主語(yǔ)從句．

解答 A young man called Low-carbon Brother became a hit one on the Internet in 2011，who suggests living a low carbon life，which means using less energy in our daily life so that we can help reduce carbon dioxide in the air．（高分句型）（人物介紹和走紅時(shí)間）For example，he always picks up some waste paper on the street and uses the blank side to write something and while he is watching TV，he always turns down the brightness to the minimum and turns off the light．Besides，he goes to work by bike instead of driving．Some people think that what he is doing is just a show and impractical．（高分句型）（人物做法和大家的看法）But as far as I am concerned，I strongly support his idea and his behavior because although what he is doing has no huge effect on global warming，he at least can enjoy a healthy life．（高分句型）（個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本文屬于提綱類寫作，要求對(duì)人物的事跡進(jìn)行介紹及眾人的評(píng)價(jià)并且表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)，文章寫作語(yǔ)言豐富，句式復(fù)雜，多重復(fù)合句的使用極大地增添了文章的色彩，在發(fā)表個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)的時(shí)候，用語(yǔ)得體，提升了整個(gè)文章的檔次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性．