Question

每個(gè)人對(duì)幸福都有自己的向往和理解，什么才是幸福的生活呢？你們學(xué)校的English Club 舉行了以My Happy Life為題的征文活動(dòng)，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面的表格提示，再加上你自己的實(shí)際情況，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一寫(xiě)你對(duì)幸福生活的理解。

在學(xué)校	有知心好友 有喜歡的學(xué)科和活動(dòng) ……
在家庭	幸福的家庭 難忘的旅行 ……
在社會(huì)	幫助他人，保護(hù)環(huán)境 ……
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要求：1）表達(dá)清楚，語(yǔ)法正確，上下文連貫；
2）必須包括表格中所有的相關(guān)信息，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
3）詞數(shù)：100詞左右（征文的開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）；
4）不得使用真實(shí)姓名、班級(jí)、地名等。
My happy life
What is a happy life? Different persons have different answers. I think my life is very happy.
                                                                              
                                                                             

Answer 1

My happy life
　　　What is a happy life? Different persons have different answers. I think my life is very happy.
I was born in a small ordinary family and I'm studying in an ordinary school. I am a ordinary student.In my opinion, to be ordinary is happy.
At school, I'm not a top student. But I have good friends. We study together and play together. And we also take part in football match together. That's our favourite activity. There is also my favourite subject at school.It's English.It makes me know more about other countries and culture.
At home, I have a happy family.There are three people in my family, my father,my mother and me.We love each other very much.We often go to travel together. Last summer, we went to Beijing.It's my first time to go to Beijing. It's fantastic and unforgettable.
What's more, I pay attention to our society and environment. I like helping others. I'm very happy to do that.Environment is very important to us.Protecting our environment is our duty.We should do it from ourselves.
In a word, to do what I should do and what I like doing is happy.

試題分析：本題是提綱作文，但除了所給提綱外還應(yīng)有自由發(fā)揮。文章主要寫(xiě)的幸福生活，題中要求從在學(xué)校在家庭和在社會(huì)三個(gè)方面來(lái)寫(xiě)。不僅要表述出個(gè)人情況，能說(shuō)明幸福之處是關(guān)鍵。文章要把所提示內(nèi)容包括在內(nèi)，同時(shí)要注意文章的結(jié)構(gòu)要清晰連貫，可以適當(dāng)?shù)膶?duì)所提示內(nèi)容和自己所添加內(nèi)容進(jìn)行整合。運(yùn)用所學(xué)知識(shí)真實(shí)表達(dá)自我感受。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)連貫緊湊，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練明了。清楚地描述了自己的個(gè)人情況。同時(shí)又從學(xué)校，家庭，社會(huì)三個(gè)方面描述了自己的喜好，職責(zé)和自己在做愛(ài)好的事情，盡自己的職責(zé)的時(shí)候我感受到的幸福感。文章用到了一些固定短語(yǔ)，比如what’s more. 使文章主體三部分更加連貫。運(yùn)用了一些復(fù)合句，使表達(dá)更明確。文章末尾進(jìn)行總結(jié)點(diǎn)題有點(diǎn)睛之筆的作用。